Write a letter to your friend suggesting whether to read music or business management
| Your friend is asking for your advice, she goes to a university and can’t decide whether to study music or business management. Write a letter and in it say ⇨ how you felt when you got the letter, ⇨ what the good points are for both sides and ⇨ what your advice is? |
Dear Sarah,
It was such a delightful surprise to receive your letter. I’m truly honoured that you’ve sought my advice regarding such an important decision in your life.
Both music and business management are promising fields, but they cater to very different passions and career paths. Business management, no doubt, opens up numerous opportunities, especially in today’s interconnected world where entrepreneurship and innovation are thriving. With a degree in this field, you could either contribute significantly to your family’s existing enterprise or even establish your own venture. However, it is worth noting that the field is becoming increasingly saturated, and standing out requires not just education but a deep passion for the business world.
On the other hand, given your remarkable talent in singing and your impressive skills on the guitar, I would strongly encourage you to pursue music. The music industry today is vibrant and expanding rapidly, offering numerous platforms—from reality shows to digital streaming—for talented individuals to shine. Moreover, professional training through a music degree will not only refine your abilities but also open doors to teaching, performance, and production. With your natural flair, I have no doubt that music could be both a fulfilling and successful path for you.
I hope this advice helps you make an informed decision. Please pass on my warm regards to your parents. Looking forward to hearing what you decide.
Yours affectionately,
Ashish
Why This Is a Band 9 Response:
1. Task Achievement (Band 9)
- Fully satisfies the task: The response clearly gives advice and addresses the situation in a personal and thoughtful manner.
- Covers both options with balanced arguments and a clear recommendation based on the recipient’s personal strengths.
2. Coherence and Cohesion (Band 9)
- The letter is well-organized with smooth paragraphing.
- Logical structure: opening → discussion of both subjects → recommendation → closing.
- Uses cohesive devices naturally: “on the other hand,” “given your remarkable talent,” “however,” etc.
3. Lexical Resource (Band 9)
- Wide range of sophisticated and precise vocabulary:
- “interconnected world,” “saturated,” “flair,” “thriving,” “remarkable talent,” “refine your abilities,” “fulfilling path.”
- No repetition or awkward phrasing.
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (Band 9)
- No grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors.
- Wide variety of sentence structures used accurately:
- Complex structures: “Given your remarkable talent…”; “It is worth noting that…”
- Conditional sentence: “With your natural flair, I have no doubt that…”